Hacking writing

lg use paragraphs to organise my ideas

S.o.s

-use time connectives to order paragraphs

- introduce argument at the start of each paragraph.

-use at least 5 persuasive words from list

- use  the auidence’s name in each para

hackers  firstly if your a hacker then aren’t you worried about getting caught by the police.

You really want to not see your family for years.

News flash! you're heading on the right path to prison!

This recent cyber attack hey interfered with hospitals appointments and knows everybody ‘s health checks and is asking the government for 1 to 5 million dollars and then they will give it all back to them.

Secondly hackers if you're hacking into a hospital and you canceled everybody’s appointments then you’re putting people's lives at stake .

And would you like it if millions of innocent people it's just like abandoning  and then slaughtering millions of people.

News flash stop hacking!!!

a hacker that has been caught is adrian lamo who got caught by hacking into the network system such as yahoo,new york times and  google he was arrested in 2003

Thirdly hackers  you can kill yourself by hacking you really don't’ want that do you? And you really think your family is going to approve of you doing something illegal do you?

. a  dangerous hacker called jonathan james. He stole a 1.7 million dollar software from the government and killed himself to get rid of his charges.

The above paragraphs have told you that you that you should be scared of the police. About people's lives at stake and about killing yourself. If you think that hacking is allowed then you’re  dead wrong. Because i will smash your ideas hacking is illegal.

Blood and guts

L.g create a mood of fear|horror

S.o.s language that creates fear

.adjectives- noun

.see/hear

Dear mum and dad

Today i arrived to the sound of bullets raining down beside me. Everybody  dropping dead ,all bloody                                       and screaming in pain . I stood there paralysed in shock for a couple of seconds and then i ran tran  dead bodies as i go. Finally  i got  to the top of  turk hill. 10 of my friends jumped   into a trench, i followed .in the distance i hear screaming and shooting. I started to cry as my friend jack  blacked out as a bullet passed through  his head, and dropped dead. That's when  i lost it, i charged out of the  tears streaming down my cheeks. I was  screaming and shooting and stabbing trying  to avenge my fallen brothers, then it hit me, a bullet passed right through  my leg .i toppled over clutching my broken leg with my bloody hands. I thought i was going to die a horrific tragic death. Because i was screaming in pain so loudly  that i bet people could here me from australia. the n my friend simon came and rescued me then i blacked out. When i woke  i lay there petrified and in pain hoping to get fixed. I looked around i saw my friend murray lying down unconscious. I thought to myself “ i hope he s alright .” i hope i can write back to you soon.

Lucas