Made of more

L.g +&-

S.o.s 2+ 2-

Made of more, what’s a cloud made of ? answer? Water vapour but this cloud  was made of more than  water vapour.it had personification So personification is something that isn't human that has Similar human attributes. e.g In this case there was a fire and the cloud put it out with Its Rain. The Wind couldn't control him.

Two positives, 1 It describes a word i’ve never heard before and it had a good ending.

Two negatives, 1 not enough detail and not a lot of talking.

I think this film can only be watched by 10-30 year olds. I rate it a 4\5

                 ze legos story

Have you ever wondered where lego started, why it became so popular well if you really want to know read this review. This guy named ole in 1932 in denmark ran a carpentry factory but it shut down and ole lost his wife. Then ole started making wooden toys and his son Godfrey helped him. But then there was a fire and ole’s company called LEGO was decimated. But ole rebuilt his factory and godfrey took over the company. They started making plastic bricks but it wouldn’t stick together so godfrey built bricks with studs and holes in them and godfrey’s son took over and built legoland and that’s the history.

Pro-it tells the proper history of lego. Con-not enough detail.

I think this short film can only be watched by 8-100 year olds. I give this story a 5 out of 5   

Taking Flight- Film Review

S.o.s using a hook in, keywords, positives and negatives, age appropriate, and rating in order. And emotive language throughout the review

This is a short film called ‘Taking Flight’. It's about a young boy looking at a photo of his dad and his Grandpa having fun and then he the young boy and his Grandpa used their imagination.  A  Positive is that it is suitable for little kids and explores  the wonders of your imagination.   A Negative is that it is not really exciting or really motivating for slightly older kids. I think it  is  mainly for 3-7 year-olds.  I give the short film 8.5 out of 10. It's telling us 2 important life lessons: For younger kids use your imagination and for older kids no matter how old you are you can still have fun.

Picture this a robot doing whatever  you want or a car  flying you wherever you want. Obviously you know Technologies are changing as in cars are going to be driving themselves and  phones healing themselves that kind of thing but the Best type of tech that i think should be used more  in the future  Is robots. As we are  kids what would you prefer : robots or flying cars personally I think robots you might not but I do and Here are three reasons why.

P.1 have you Is a kid ever wondered what would be better for you: a flying car or a robot. You should pick robots  because well I know that it would be awesome to fly wouldn't just picture. But just think what if you  fall out of the car while 15000 feet in the air you would die but a robot may not fly but how damn cool  would it be to have a metal person doing whatever you want!!!! # robots for life.

P.2  didya know that there are about 4,000  robots working for the military! Wow! Just imagine a giant metal dude charging at you with a rapid fire shotgun!! You still think flying cars are  cool i mean what do yah think flying cars can do in the military it’s only like a two seater so the pilot and  1 soldier so what's the point and just to clarify what would you rather lose about $1.2 million as in a robot or a life? See robots are better.

P.3 do you know  how many movies have robots in   them, all ages in fact i will tell you them well i'll list a couple in their age group.  Kids movies-  big hero 6,wall-e and robots and teenager to adult movies like terminator, robocop, the matrix and way way way more  including possibly the greatest robot movie series of all time star wars. How many  movies with flying cars are  there huh!  If you said tonnes then there only science fiction so if you wanna watch a movie pick one of the robot ones not booooooring science fiction movies. You obviously want an action packed film with humour have a look at these movies and watch one with robots unless you want to be bored as heck

Concl

In the following paragraphs i have explained the following why robots are better than flying cars: 1 what’s bad about a flying car 2 the military and 3 robot movies if you help me we can make robots a real thing ( i don’t know how.) as in very popular in da future.

L.g have some good ideas and elaborate

S.o.s use good ideas

- elaborate

Dear mr peters

I am writing to inform you about who i think you should choose :labour or national? i think labour and here are three reasons why  

EDUCATION

Do you really think bill english would pay 6 billion dollars our own mental education? No he’ll probably just spend it all on dairy farming like his policies say.Any ways 1.8b of the 6 billion that labour will do  will go to deliver teachers to all of the schools around the country including i hope stratford primary school ( my school.)

Clean rivers

Do you like swimming winston? I bet so you want clean rivers. National’s not doing it so vote for labour. Greens is also an enviroment party so i'll bet they’ll do it to.

Parental leave

Labours going to extend parental leave from 18 weeks to 26 weeks. That’s 8 more weeks! That’s a lot of time! and nationals just thinking of new roads. Really? Roads? Roads are perfectly fine? Aren’t they? Probably don’t choose national.  

In this story i have explained the following things why labour is better

Education, clean rivers and parental leave..

So if you like my story then you should agree with me then vote for labour!

By lucas jacobson

Year 5 room 6

Stratford primary school.

Sps cooks up a feeding frenzy

On monday 11th september year 5 and 6 students cooked up a delicious restaurant experience! The day as filled with table setters,preparing food and  every cook’s worst nightmare:dishes. The atmosphere was absolutely electric buzzing with students. Waiters setting tables here and there and chefs were busy preparing a 3 course meal entree,main and dessert. One of the groups was irish leprechauns. Their menu was Entree: soda bread. Main:irish stew with side dish colcannon and dessert irish style macarons. The irish leprechauns customers thought everything was cooked to immaculate perfection except the customers may have wanted more than one macaron. I took one look in the kitchen and i could barely step in there! everyone was rushing about here and there. I wished i could've  tried the food  it looked amazing. All of the waiters were so polite to their customers just like in a real restaurant. And the clean up everyone had to do dishes  ( i could have sworn there were over 1000!) the tables had to be cleared,spills had to be cleaned. It took ages. But they did it anyway what a day!!        

Mace Windu

l .g Use good ideas and Elaborate.s.o.s  - Good ideas including:  including examples and elaboration.

His Brown skin is as brown as the solid ground. His  eyes are the colour of dirt which helps the grass grow .His head is as bald as a chicken without feathers.

His lightsaber is as purple as a purple minion.

His robes are as brown as his head. His cape is as long as the Great Wall of China.

Master Windu likes to use his lightsaber and meditate which he does with ease.

Albus dumbledore

Albus dumbledore has Shimmering silver hair that is as long as China. He has bright Blue-Eyes the colour of the beautiful blue Sky. Is gravy and as as long as an elephant trunk.

his wand is as Jagged as a tree branch. his robe is as long is the Great Wall of China. his hand is and wrinkly is a grandpa.

Dumbledore is affectionate as my mum on a  lovely sunny evening. Dumbledore is as sensible as a noble can sitting on his throne.

Dumbledore has excelled in Magic which he likes to do with ease  

Scooter crash

l.g use punctuation to assist my meaning in writing
s.o.s
- speech marks
-commas and brackets

As I go around the corner with my mate Jason. I feel like I'm on a bullet train.we swerve around the senior court and slow down to jump the  stairs. We are at SPS.

We jump the stairs like it was a centimetre drop from a cliff. Then all of a sudden.we stop,put our backs against the wall and push off.

When I jump I feel like a bird that suddenly I lose control and end up body slamming the ground with a mighty thud! (ouch!) “ugh” i winced. “Are you alright?” asked Jason “yeah i’m good” i coughed (not!) “there’s a duty teacher over there” “would you like me to get her?” “yeah sure”  i stuttered when  Jason went to go get the duty teacher I looked at the damage, my elbow was grazed and bleeding, my hand was sore and bleeding, my knee and leg with stinging and that's about it. I started limping / riding my scooter back to class but Jason caught up with the duty teacher. It was Mrs Dombroski . She put a plaster on me and told me to go fix myself up in class. Then I ended up with about 7 plasters on! (ha ha ha)         

        

jeff and bob  

Use precise words to assist my meaning in writing

• Speech marks
• commas

Once  upon a time    there lived two  Young  men  called jeff and bob. Jeff is boring but handsome  and bob is funny but  ugly they  are Best friends.  The lived in a village with Blacksmiths and  farmers and all sorts.

One day While in a cave mining Jeff discovered diamonds. “whoa” yelled jeff Then Along Came Bob “whoa” muttered bob but suddenly 6 zombies ran in  attacked and killed Bob and turned him into a zombie. They all turned on jeff “noooooooooooooo” wailed jeff. But suddenly jeff thought of good times with bob and smiled so bright that it vapourized the zombies and brang back bob “yay i'm back.” beamed bob “yippee” cheered jeff and they lived happily ever after.

 Dan Carter’s shot                                

S.o.s

S,a,p,s

Ryhme

Lines like a poem

In the Mighty stadium

Dan carter gets ready To shoot

He kicks the ball

Hopes for all

And prevents an all black downfall.

The three little pigs

L.G use punctuation to assist my meaning in writing

S.O.S

• Speech marks
• Commas     

Once upon a time There were three little pigs and big But not so bad wolf. They lived in a beautiful  forest with bunnies and cute little duckies One day the wolf looked in the pantry in  for food for lunch, But it was empty so he said after find some food. He went to the first little pig  house, but it was made of straw.  He went up to the door and said, ‘hey Stanley are you in? Wanna have some lunch?”But Stanley said, “go away dog!’ And so he huffed and puffed and blew Stanley's house down.  in the Ruins and he saw lunch , the pig. But he wasn't satisfied. So he set off to Tucker’s house which was made out of sticks he went up to the door and said, “ hey Tucker are you in wanna have some lunch?’’ and he said “ go away bum sniffer!” then he huffed and puffed and blew Tucker’s house down! in amongst the sticks was Tucker and the wolf ate him! But he was not satisfied. The wolf walked up egg’s house and his was made out of bricks then he knocked on the door and said  “hey egg are you in wanna  have some lunch?” but egg said, “go away Flea bitten dog!’’ he was so mad that he climbed through the chimney  and ate egg! And only know was he satisfied with lunch then he went back home and slept for an half an hour!

The end

      How to get luck\inspiration

L.G use precise verbs

S.O.S haven’t used get, grab and put                                                                                                          -Use humor

If you want to be inspired or want luck then follow these steps and you will be the king of luck.

You will need

• A mountain with clouds above it
• A family photo
• A very inspiring piece of work
• A ladder                           

Step 1 climb to the top of a mountain with clouds above it and hope you Don't pass out from cold or fall off a cliff on the way

Step 2  Stick your head in the clouds:  tip  If your too short use the ladder and stand on it.

 Step 3  Hope that you will have luck and inspiration. And that you don't die because of high altitudes And also sing Kumbaya

step 4 Snatch a family photo after you get off the mountain

Step 5 stare at your photo for  a couple of minutes or so until you feel inspired.

Step 6 look at a very cool piece of art such as leonardo da vinci’s flying machine and get inspired by that.

If you followed these easy steps well then I hope you are in luck

Easy ice cream

Purpose: for a yummy dessert

Audience: 5-7 year olds

L.G use language appropriate for your audience.

S.O.S

. 5 steps

.use time connectives

Are you tired of having boring popsicles for dessert\supper? Well if you follow these easy steps you can make your very own ice cream in a bag!

You will need

.ice cubes

.1 cup half and half

.kosher salt

.suger

. vanilla extract

.a small zip lock bag

.a large zip lock bag.

. your favourite ice cream flavours

Step 1 firstly combine the half and half,sugar and vanilla extract into the small bag then close it.

Step 2 fill the big bag halfway with ice cubes, then sprinkle kosher salt over the cubes

Step 3 place the small bag that has the half and half stuff into the big bag then seal the big bag

Step 4 shake the bags for 5-10m minutes then take the small bag out of the big bag

Step 5 add the ice cream flavours you want then enjoy!

If you  followed these simple steps  then you will have your very own ice cream!

L.G Use precise words to give accurate detail to my reader.

S.O.S

-Precise nouns- Include materials in your steps

- descriptive verbs e.g:clean / replace

- Bossy verbs at the start of the sentence stick/glue e.g tell them what to do

how to make fidget spinner.

Are you tired of doing nothing at boring times? Well now you don’t have to be bored i will teach you how to make a fidget spinner.

You will need

• Adult or senior help
• Hot glue gun
• Screwdriver
• 5  bottle caps
• Scissors
• skewer

Step 1 glue two bottle caps together. Get an adult or senior student you help you with all of the gluing.

Step 2 poke a hole in the two caps you previously stuck together.

Step 3 stick the 3 bottle caps on the 2 stuck together.

Step 4 cut the skewer about a ¼ of it’s length and then stick it in the hole you made earlier.

There you go.  you know have a diy fidget spinner.

Hacking writing

lg use paragraphs to organise my ideas

S.o.s

-use time connectives to order paragraphs

- introduce argument at the start of each paragraph.

-use at least 5 persuasive words from list

- use  the auidence’s name in each para

hackers  firstly if your a hacker then aren’t you worried about getting caught by the police.

You really want to not see your family for years.

News flash! you're heading on the right path to prison!

This recent cyber attack hey interfered with hospitals appointments and knows everybody ‘s health checks and is asking the government for 1 to 5 million dollars and then they will give it all back to them.

Secondly hackers if you're hacking into a hospital and you canceled everybody’s appointments then you’re putting people's lives at stake .

And would you like it if millions of innocent people it's just like abandoning  and then slaughtering millions of people.

News flash stop hacking!!!

a hacker that has been caught is adrian lamo who got caught by hacking into the network system such as yahoo,new york times and  google he was arrested in 2003

Thirdly hackers  you can kill yourself by hacking you really don't’ want that do you? And you really think your family is going to approve of you doing something illegal do you?

. a  dangerous hacker called jonathan james. He stole a 1.7 million dollar software from the government and killed himself to get rid of his charges.

The above paragraphs have told you that you that you should be scared of the police. About people's lives at stake and about killing yourself. If you think that hacking is allowed then you’re  dead wrong. Because i will smash your ideas hacking is illegal.

Blood and guts

L.g create a mood of fear|horror

S.o.s language that creates fear

.adjectives- noun

.see/hear

Dear mum and dad

Today i arrived to the sound of bullets raining down beside me. Everybody  dropping dead ,all bloody                                       and screaming in pain . I stood there paralysed in shock for a couple of seconds and then i ran tran  dead bodies as i go. Finally  i got  to the top of  turk hill. 10 of my friends jumped   into a trench, i followed .in the distance i hear screaming and shooting. I started to cry as my friend jack  blacked out as a bullet passed through  his head, and dropped dead. That's when  i lost it, i charged out of the  tears streaming down my cheeks. I was  screaming and shooting and stabbing trying  to avenge my fallen brothers, then it hit me, a bullet passed right through  my leg .i toppled over clutching my broken leg with my bloody hands. I thought i was going to die a horrific tragic death. Because i was screaming in pain so loudly  that i bet people could here me from australia. the n my friend simon came and rescued me then i blacked out. When i woke  i lay there petrified and in pain hoping to get fixed. I looked around i saw my friend murray lying down unconscious. I thought to myself “ i hope he s alright .” i hope i can write back to you soon.

Lucas

Moment in time

L.g describe your senses in a moment.

S.o.s  present tense\precise wording

10 key words

Shining

Rustling

Running

Darkness

Cold

Whispering

Bright

Pajamas

Snapping

Torches

It was a dark night ,dark enough for spotlight. The only thing i can see are the lights of the torches. 123 go!  

i am off with heath and jordan running to a brilliant hiding spot.”it is taking awhile to get sorted i thought.” rustling everywhere. The darkness is useful for hiding i thought to myself. the girls are off ,through the bushes and out. When a girl came by me.her   shining light  is blinding me. Luckily for me and jordan we are not but heath is unlucky.most people are in onesies or  pajamas.
everybody is whispering mate”i say to jordan. More girls are coming by  they are snapping the branches snap! Snap! snap!  Very soon everybody is found except me and jordan! So that’s it we are going to be found but we are still not and i hear male voices! That means me and jordan are in trouble. Its boys and girls onto us two! But we still didn’t get found! In the end i am the winner with jordan!